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Some people think that certain old buildings are more worth preserving than other ones.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In this modernisation era, the leveling up of facilities is really significant in hindering the richness of society. Hence, there is a controversial conversation between people who support the idea of preserving old buildings is more vital than preserving modern ones. From my perspective, I disagree with this as the new buildings also play an important part in the future rural restructure.
First and foremost, modern buildings bring the socio - economic benefits to communities, which are the value they deliver to people and the inside beauty of the city. The moderner the buildings are, the more versatile they are. For example, a modern building can have up to fifty to eighty floors which are mixed and lauched with many functions such as a mall on second floor which allows people to go shopping for necessities and a pool on the highest floor for the swimming activities. Moreover, the growth of construction field leads to the upgrading of the building structures where these towers are gradually turned into pieces of art instead of just nomarl accomodation. Eventually, this results in the entire growth of communities, in social aspect and economic aspect, respectively.
Secondly, the preservation of both old and modern buildings should be launched at the same scale and time due to

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