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Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on the environment, eating habits, and families.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that the fast food is not healthy for out body, and make bad impact for our society and family. In my opinion, im strongly agree if the fast food is not good meal for we consumed.

Firstly, the fast food is one of the highest
meal that everyone likes. Every corner of the city would present the fast food restaurant. However, if we always consume the bad food, it will make negative impacts to our body likes, obesity, and colestrol. The reason that fast food is not good for ourself is they used many preservative that will absorbed with our body, and make negative impacts such as disease.

Finally, the fast food is surrounded in our country and has a many costumers in every age. The cause of the fast food
make the environment suffer in their health because that food has a good taste but a bad impact for example, KFC, MCD, etc. Every person that always eat the fast food dont get it about the impact to their body. Moreover, because of the food is easy to get more people always buy that food, unfortunetly they dont know why the food is easy to cook. The food is fast to buy beacuse they already have it in a long time, and thats why the food is not good.

in conclusion, the fast food is really easy to get, however the ingredients is not good for out health and body. Awareness of our people should be increased for consumed the healthier food.

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