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Many museums charge for admission while others are free.
Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

Whether museums should be free to the public or the otherwise, is a big argument we have in our current days. Many people wish to explore and discover the past world through relics and artifacts to gain more knowledge and experiences, but should this access be easily accessible by making it free or should people pay to help its continuation and conservation?

Free museum admissions could help the museum gain more visitors, the arts, works, and artifacts could be highly appreciated by a bigger quantity of people. And regarding the conservations, there are still many donators whom are museums appreciators in the world who'd willingly take part in its preservation by donating large amounts of money. But while free museums had several advantages, are there enough willing donators for each museums in the whole world? By charging people for admission to museums, people can take their own parts in helping to preserve museums, but it does not have to charge big amounts of money. Furthermore, by putting out the low price, it will attract more people to come and it could produce enough or more money rather than putting out the high price.

In my opinion, in spite of the advantages free museums have, the opportunities of museums with charges will outweigh its disadvantages, with the requirements of it putting out a low price for it to be as accessible as free museums.

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