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It is better to learn the way people lived in the past through films and video records than written documents.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I disagree with that opinion because sometimes film/video didn't take the whole story about the situation that people had. For instance, how Lady Diana died or lived in a palace doesn't really show much even the producers already put in detailed to their film, but the video/film would be longer than the normal film/movie if they put everything in detail. That's why people not really learnt from the film/video.
The undetails story sometimes could make people will understand it wrong, because the story could be difficult to understand or ambigue. That's why sometimes people watch the it twice or more to understand it. On the other side, that kind of film/video would bring people lazy to understand especially for busy people that only watch film/video on their leisure time.
Instead of watching film/video to learn something, would be better if people learn it from book/e-book because the writers always describe it on details about everything using elegant words. Through reading a book we could understand how the writer feelings as well, so we could learn by their knowledge and their feelings about it.

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