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In many countries, the tradition of families having meals together is disappearing. Why is this happening? What will be the effect of it on the family and society?
The tradition of having meals alongside with family members in a lot of country is vanishing. I completely agree to the statement because mostly it is driven by the restricted time to be together and each members tend to have their own schedule.

First of all, the time to stay at home seems to be the time for the elderly to rest at home as the elderly will have a longer time off the house since they will have a lot of things to finish outside. Moreover, the elderly prefer to have meals outside because they think it will surely save a significant amount of time rather than having meals on house. While most elderly being out of home, the children as well also have a lot of matters to do such as going to school and hangout with their own friends. Therefore, the elderly and children seem to have setted schedule on their own which turns meeting each other and having meals especially at home feels hard.

The hard times to gather and have meals together as a family will bring great effects to the bonds between family members. As the main idea of gathering is that they can communicate and share their thought to each other after going through a long days outside. Based on research, children with a routine of communicating with family members will be easier when it comes to sharing thoughts and communicate rather than the one who do not.

To conclude, having meals together with family will be a hard thing to do because of the different schedule between each family members and this will lead to a bad bonds between families.

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