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Nowadays, many people do not repair old things to use them further and throw old things away when they buy new things.
What factors cause this phenomenon?
What effects this phenomenon has?
There are many reasons why many people do not repair old things and just throw them away and buy a new one. One of them is the fact that it is more convenient and easier to buy new things instead of fixing it. Furthermore, if we consider the price for buying a newer item instead of repairing it; it is not much of a difference. We can take a phone for example. If someone broke their phone and somehow it is close to being unusable, they would probably buy a new one. This is because the price for repairing the old phone ,that is almost unusable, is extremely pricey and sometimes buying a newer modeled phone can be cheaper than fixing it. In addition to this, trends also take a big part on this phenomenon. Sometimes people do not want to be late on trends and that leads to many people buying new things once their old things are broken. This does not only happen when their old things are broken, but sometimes if the old things are out of trend, they would end up throwing it out and buying the new things that are on trend.

It might be more convenient to buy a new item, but we should consider the effects it causes. One of them is
over consumption. Once we know the fact that buying a new item is sometimes cheaper than repairing it, a lot of people might make it a habit. When their item is broken and repairing it is not that pricey, they would most likely buy a new one because the prices are similar. This becomes a repetitive cycle that ends up in over consumption. Over consumption is extremely bad for the environment. Especially when it comes to over consuming clothes, houses, and fast cars. Over consuming these things can result in excess waste and pollution.

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